Characters are for and against abortion.
Speaking as a character who has had an abortion
Doesn’t everyone have the right over their own bodies? Today I am going to talk about the controversial issue that is abortion. I myself have recently been through the struggle that is an abortion. I just felt completely physically and emotionally drained. The bags under my eyes stuck out like a sore thumb and I could feel myself dozing off on my bus route to work, and other people began to see the change in me too. Put it this way, if I had to pay 5p for the bags under my eyes I would've been bankupt. I wasn’t my happy outgoing self that I normally am and that I should’ve been. I was completely embarrassed and ashamed at what I had done! And why should I be, why did I feel this way? Simply due to the way that abortion has been painted out to the public. It is seen as a vicious crime on an unborn child. Although I respect people’s views, I simply cannot let other women feel the way that I felt when going through this. This is quite a taboo topic that is rarely discussed within everyday life; however, I believe that more people need to understand the arguments for abortion. Women shouldn’t feel ashamed to speak about this and, due to women not having the confidence to speak out about their experience, they feel very alone, like the whole world is against and judging them. Women have a moral right to decide what to do with their bodies. You do not know the women’s situation or reason to decide to abort. It could be critical for their dreams in life. I desperately want to (and always have) had such a love for travel and a desperate desire to one day be a part of a cabin crew. Just tell me this: how on earth could I lead this sort of lifestyle with a child? Completely impossible! This leads on to my second point. The right to abortion is vital for individual women to achieve their full potential. If a sporting hero was too accidently, inconveniently get pregnant before a big sporting event, they would have no choice other than to abort. From a feminist’s point of view, abortion is vital for gender equality. Banning abortion could be highly dangerous. Banning abortion puts women at risk by forcing them to use illegal abortionists. In countries where abortion is illegal, such as Argentina, women are left severely ill by the illegal methods of abortion they are forced to use. The right to abortion should be part of a portfolio of pregnancy rights that enables women to make a truly free choice whether or not to end a pregnancy and they should feel un-judged and confident on their decision. The women may not feel happy about having to get an abortion and therefore we should not be judgemental on them and make them feel as comfortable as they can with their strong decision. Women have a right to decide what she can or cannot do with her body and should have to right to decide whether or not the foetus remains in her body. To finalise, women need the right to abortion to have the full rights over their own bodies, without this right they do not have the same moral status as men. We as a whole need to realise that that we should not judge anyone under any circumstances until we understand one hundred percent the situation that they are in!
Speaking as a Catholic against abortion
How would you feel if your life ended before it even began? How would you feel if you were never given the opportunity to live, see the world and explore new places? Speaking as a proud Catholic, I must put forward my opinion on the highly controversial issue of abortion. The fact that some of you believe that it is an acceptable thing to do makes me feel physically sick! How could you possibly live with yourself knowing that you took away the greatest gift a person could ever receive; life. We as Catholics see abortion as simply being the termination of the unborn human life. We believe that, whatever the circumstance, abortion is always wrong, sinful and completely not right! The circumstance in which the life was conceived is completely irrelevant to the poor life of that fragile life. It is evil. The whole concept of the abortion route in evil and no how good the intention is, it will always remain a sin in my eyes. Abortion does not free women. They say that what women need for equality is not free access to abortion, but to be given what they need to survive financially and socially as mothers. They need inexpensive and realises childcare and a school that understands and acknowledges the needs of mothers. Abortion also actually damages women; some people oppose abortion because it can damage the long-term physical and emotional health of women who have had an abortion. Women will eventually come to the realisation that what they have done to their unborn child is plain and simply wrong and cruel and they will have an eternity of pain thinking about it, every time the see a child’s rosy cheeks and sparkling eyes, guilt will rush through their veins like a river and their whole body will overcome with hatred towards themselves. All children are unique, who says this child won’t be the one to come up with a cure for a major illness? Aborting this child will not just affect you and the child, but the entire world. Abortion is murder; it is the deliberate taking of a human life. Unwanted babies could be adopted, so many desperate couples are looking to adopt every single day, so abortion is, in this case, very selfish! The rights of the unborn child are equal to those of the mother. Defenceless babies need special protection against since they cannot stand up for their own rights. The embryo, if left alone, will develop into a beautiful, unique human being; So if you are ever thinking about having an abortion, stop being selfish and look at the bigger picture. It’s not all about you; it’s about equality and the right to live.
Evaluation
The genre of this piece of text is a blog post. The intended audience for this text was women who are either going through an abortion or for people who judge abortion but do not think about the feelings, ethics and situation behind someone's story when contemplating having an abortion. The purpose of the blog is to comment upon the issue of abortion and to inform the audience of the emotions and feelings behind abortion. I think that the expectations were to receive a civil balanced argument on abortion; however both sides seem to go in very hard on the topic and reinforce their opinions of abortion being either right or wrong. The second blogger uses the word ‘evil’ several times. This reinforces their thought on the topic and the word creates imagery in the mind of the reader. The use of the term evil paints a picture of the devil and is associated with the colour red which screams danger. This is the intended message of the blogger to get across to their audience. The first blogger keeps reinforcing the fact that we as an outsider could not possibly understand the situation of the woman debating/going through an abortion. This person who has been though an abortion is very passionate for women not to feel guilty for having gone through an abortion. The second paragraph was shorted due to limited points to make against the topic. There are so many emotive things to include in the ‘for’ abortion paragraph. My characters are unknown bloggers who are just eager and passionate to get their views and points across.
Speaking as a character who has had an abortion
Doesn’t everyone have the right over their own bodies? Today I am going to talk about the controversial issue that is abortion. I myself have recently been through the struggle that is an abortion. I just felt completely physically and emotionally drained. The bags under my eyes stuck out like a sore thumb and I could feel myself dozing off on my bus route to work, and other people began to see the change in me too. Put it this way, if I had to pay 5p for the bags under my eyes I would've been bankupt. I wasn’t my happy outgoing self that I normally am and that I should’ve been. I was completely embarrassed and ashamed at what I had done! And why should I be, why did I feel this way? Simply due to the way that abortion has been painted out to the public. It is seen as a vicious crime on an unborn child. Although I respect people’s views, I simply cannot let other women feel the way that I felt when going through this. This is quite a taboo topic that is rarely discussed within everyday life; however, I believe that more people need to understand the arguments for abortion. Women shouldn’t feel ashamed to speak about this and, due to women not having the confidence to speak out about their experience, they feel very alone, like the whole world is against and judging them. Women have a moral right to decide what to do with their bodies. You do not know the women’s situation or reason to decide to abort. It could be critical for their dreams in life. I desperately want to (and always have) had such a love for travel and a desperate desire to one day be a part of a cabin crew. Just tell me this: how on earth could I lead this sort of lifestyle with a child? Completely impossible! This leads on to my second point. The right to abortion is vital for individual women to achieve their full potential. If a sporting hero was too accidently, inconveniently get pregnant before a big sporting event, they would have no choice other than to abort. From a feminist’s point of view, abortion is vital for gender equality. Banning abortion could be highly dangerous. Banning abortion puts women at risk by forcing them to use illegal abortionists. In countries where abortion is illegal, such as Argentina, women are left severely ill by the illegal methods of abortion they are forced to use. The right to abortion should be part of a portfolio of pregnancy rights that enables women to make a truly free choice whether or not to end a pregnancy and they should feel un-judged and confident on their decision. The women may not feel happy about having to get an abortion and therefore we should not be judgemental on them and make them feel as comfortable as they can with their strong decision. Women have a right to decide what she can or cannot do with her body and should have to right to decide whether or not the foetus remains in her body. To finalise, women need the right to abortion to have the full rights over their own bodies, without this right they do not have the same moral status as men. We as a whole need to realise that that we should not judge anyone under any circumstances until we understand one hundred percent the situation that they are in!
Speaking as a Catholic against abortion
How would you feel if your life ended before it even began? How would you feel if you were never given the opportunity to live, see the world and explore new places? Speaking as a proud Catholic, I must put forward my opinion on the highly controversial issue of abortion. The fact that some of you believe that it is an acceptable thing to do makes me feel physically sick! How could you possibly live with yourself knowing that you took away the greatest gift a person could ever receive; life. We as Catholics see abortion as simply being the termination of the unborn human life. We believe that, whatever the circumstance, abortion is always wrong, sinful and completely not right! The circumstance in which the life was conceived is completely irrelevant to the poor life of that fragile life. It is evil. The whole concept of the abortion route in evil and no how good the intention is, it will always remain a sin in my eyes. Abortion does not free women. They say that what women need for equality is not free access to abortion, but to be given what they need to survive financially and socially as mothers. They need inexpensive and realises childcare and a school that understands and acknowledges the needs of mothers. Abortion also actually damages women; some people oppose abortion because it can damage the long-term physical and emotional health of women who have had an abortion. Women will eventually come to the realisation that what they have done to their unborn child is plain and simply wrong and cruel and they will have an eternity of pain thinking about it, every time the see a child’s rosy cheeks and sparkling eyes, guilt will rush through their veins like a river and their whole body will overcome with hatred towards themselves. All children are unique, who says this child won’t be the one to come up with a cure for a major illness? Aborting this child will not just affect you and the child, but the entire world. Abortion is murder; it is the deliberate taking of a human life. Unwanted babies could be adopted, so many desperate couples are looking to adopt every single day, so abortion is, in this case, very selfish! The rights of the unborn child are equal to those of the mother. Defenceless babies need special protection against since they cannot stand up for their own rights. The embryo, if left alone, will develop into a beautiful, unique human being; So if you are ever thinking about having an abortion, stop being selfish and look at the bigger picture. It’s not all about you; it’s about equality and the right to live.
Evaluation
The genre of this piece of text is a blog post. The intended audience for this text was women who are either going through an abortion or for people who judge abortion but do not think about the feelings, ethics and situation behind someone's story when contemplating having an abortion. The purpose of the blog is to comment upon the issue of abortion and to inform the audience of the emotions and feelings behind abortion. I think that the expectations were to receive a civil balanced argument on abortion; however both sides seem to go in very hard on the topic and reinforce their opinions of abortion being either right or wrong. The second blogger uses the word ‘evil’ several times. This reinforces their thought on the topic and the word creates imagery in the mind of the reader. The use of the term evil paints a picture of the devil and is associated with the colour red which screams danger. This is the intended message of the blogger to get across to their audience. The first blogger keeps reinforcing the fact that we as an outsider could not possibly understand the situation of the woman debating/going through an abortion. This person who has been though an abortion is very passionate for women not to feel guilty for having gone through an abortion. The second paragraph was shorted due to limited points to make against the topic. There are so many emotive things to include in the ‘for’ abortion paragraph. My characters are unknown bloggers who are just eager and passionate to get their views and points across.
Two equally passionate and disparate views. I can feel the two voices as different people and I liked the much heavier use of metaphor in the second one. Try and think about the purposes these people have in writing (the first one is much clearer in this case) and how they could achieve them - for instance, if blogger A wants to support women who are making a difficult decision or have had an abortion, could you do some research that she could integrate? What about post titles? You will need to make it clear in the commentary who the bloggers think are their target audiences and how they speak to them rather than just a general reader so redraft with this in mind. Very good start.
ReplyDeleteThe creative section is so detailed and powerful - did you run out of time for the commentary? I would rather mark a properly finished piece so please email me a few PEE paragraphs discussing the differing techniques and how they suit the GRAPE. I liked the exploration of the connotations of the adjective "evil" - use the appropriate terminology and link to what it might make specific audiences think of and feel.
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